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"Silver the Hedgehog...just who are you?"

"I'm the one who's going to save this world, and secure it's future.  Eliminating a robotic copy such as yourself was the last thing that needed to be done before I could take my real target on in battle.  Any last words, faker?"

"I am not defeated so easily hedgehog from the future, I will return even stronger than I am now.  And when I do, you'll wish that you never came to the past."

"I highly doubt that, but encourage you to try all the same....Shadow Android.  Now, take this!"
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It was a beautiful day in Station Square as a recognizable blue hedgehog was walking around the city at his leisure.  Eggman's latest scheme had been halted a few days ago, and things were back to normal.  Tails was busy working on some new machine that would mimic the power of the Master Emerald, but since Knuckles wouldn't let him near the real Master Emerald with his tech it wasn't going as easily as making a fake chaos emerald was.  Shadow was off who knows where with his team, Rouge and Omega, and the Chaotix were, as usual, trying to get some cash.  All of Sonic's friends and enemies were busy, so he had the day all to himself, or so he thought.

"Aha!  I've finally found you Sonic.  You don't know how hard looking for you can be."  That familiar voice belonged to the sweet, but occasionally misguided, pink hedgehog named Amy Rose.  As Sonic's self proclaimed girlfriend, she made it her life's mission to spend as much time with him as possible.  Since the world wasn't being threatened, Amy saw the perfect opportunity for a date with Sonic.  One that wouldn't end with her being kidnapped.

"Oh, hey Amy, I didn't know you were in Station Square today too.  Let me guess, you want us to go on a date don't you?"  Ever since he had rescued her from Metal Sonic that very first time, Sonic has known how Amy felt about him.  He'd spent a lot of time purposely avoiding and running away from her, but what else could he do?  Sonic himself rarely stopped to think about something like love.  But he would admit (to Tails, and possibly Knuckles if he ever got drunk), that he avoided Amy on most of those occasions because he was too shy to face her.  But today he was feeling a little different.

"Exactly, you've finally realized how much I want to be with you Sonic.  Will you please, go on a date with me?"  Amy's pleading voice had actually affected Sonic that time, although she couldn't tell herself.

"Okay Amy, I'm all yours for the rest of the day. What do you want to do?"

"Oh come on Sonic it's not like you're doing any... wait a minute, did you just say what I think you did?"

"Yep.  It's been awhile since you and I spent some time together without the world being at risk.  So it's a date, unless you change your mind or something."  Sonic added that last part just to mess with Amy's head a bit.

"Now why on earth would I change my mind Sonic?  I finally have you all to myself and I'm not about to miss this opportunity."

"Well then what are we standing here for?  I'll let you decide what we do today, I'm no good at it myself.  Besides, I bet you've been planning for something like this to happen anyway."  Sonic was acting completely different, and he wanted to.  Something made him realize how much he took his friends for granted, and Amy was especially overlooked by Sonic throughout the years.  He felt that he should make it up to her by letting her get what she wants more often than he had ever since they met.  

"You bet I have Sonic, today's going to be wonderful, I just know it.  Now come on, I know just what we should do first."  Amy grabbed one of Sonic's hands and dragged him off somewhere.  To her pleasure, he didn't fight it at all.  Finally, she could have a perfect date with the person she loved.

Unbeknownst to the two of them however, was that they were being watched by a purple female cat and a silver male hedgehog.
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In the laboratory of the infamous Dr. Ivo 'Eggman' Robotnik, the evil doctor was puzzling over an odd occurrence that had happened the previous night.  Someone that appeared to be Sonic had trespassed onto one of his secret bases that he had hidden around the world, and proceeded to destroy everything that could pose to be a threat.  The last robot guard was a powerful Shadow Android that Eggman had specifically designed to be a shadow (no pun intended) of his most ingenious creation, Metal Sonic.  While not able to copy all of the real Shadow's powers, it was able to match his speeds and strength, and had similar copy abilities as Metal Sonic.  For it to be defeated so easily was not something Eggman took lightly.

What disturbed Eggman most of all was that the unknown assailant hadn't even touched a single one of his robots with his hands.  With a motion of his wrist they all would either simple be destroyed or torn apart, some even by their own weapons, all while this hedgehog simply walked by them.  It was most definitely not Sonic, since this didn't fit his style of fighting Eggman.  Shadow was out of the question as well since G.U.N. only cared about what he was up to when the world was actually at stake.  This hedgehog was someone completely new.  And it scared Eggman, because he knew that if the hedgehog decided to attack him directly, he wouldn't stand a chance against him.

He had no other options at this point.  With his three hundred IQ actually using logic, he decide to call upon three individuals he had to rely on when Metal Sonic had locked him in his own flying fortress.  They would be able to get the information he wanted, although the cost would be something he wished he could avoid like the last time, he made the call all the same.
Next chapter: [link]

So I'm going to finally post something after 6 months of doing nothing with this account. If anyone happens to read and enjoy this first chapter please let me know and I'll be sure to continue it. Nothing special here, just a Sonic fanfic I randomly decided to start writing one day. Any and almost all comments will be appreciated greatly.

Now for an actual description. In this chapter we get three scenes all featuring different familiar faces. Bet none of you expected to see a Shadow Android appearance now did you?

All Sonic the Hedgehog Characters belong to Sega
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iammemyself Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm going to do a little critique here, I'm not an English major but by your profile you seem to be serious about this so I'll be serious about it too.

>the Chaotix were as usual, trying to get some cash.
You need a comma after were if you're going to put a comma after usual.

>to the sweet, but occasionally misguided pink hedgehog
You need a comma after misguided or no comma at all (which makes it a bit more awkward)

>Since the world wasn't threatened today
Wasn't being threatened?

In the next paragraph you switch tenses and start speaking about Sonic in the present tense. You can't switch tenses in the middle. It has to be past or present.

>Amy was especially looked over by Sonic throughout the years
That's not quite the right word...it makes it sound like he's been checking her out for a while. I think you meant passed over. So more like "Amy had been especially passed over by Sonic throughout the years."

When you describe Blaze and Silver you don't need the commas there.

>and proceeded to destroy everything that would attack him.
Do you mean to say that he destroyed everything that DID attack him? Or everything that was a threat?

I got a little confused. You said he destroyed every robot that attacked him, and then you said they all blew up by themselves? That kind of doesn't sound like destroying to me.

You're off to a good start, it's an interesting pretense. Sonic seems a little laidback about Amy, I know he's consenting today but he's being a bit agreeable. Good work with keeping 'says' out of it.
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ThePenVsTheSword Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2012  Student Writer
While you thankfully have most of the spelling and punctuation right- I spotted a few spots where a period should've been used instead of a comma- you should double space the paragraphs. Deviantart and most other websites have a habit of clumping stories into an ugly jumble.
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MegaProtoXII Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the feedback. I was concerned when I uploaded this that my spacing was messed up, but I wasn't sure how to go about fixing it. I'll try and save the second chapter from the fate I left it to as well. Thanks again
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ThePenVsTheSword Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome. It's quite an easy fix. Just try copy and pasting it into an online spell check or blank space, then post it to deviantart. It should space it properly if you've double spaced it already. Only problem is you'll lose any bolding or italics because they'll change to normal font.
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Realise-FrenchFries Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I enjoyed reading this a lot. I liked the beginning part where Shadow and Silver are talking, it's mysterious & it makes you want to know whats happening. I also loved the part where Sonic agrees to go on a date with Amy, I thought that was well written. (I'm quite a big SonAmy fan so I would love it anyway ^_^) You should be proud of your work, its good :)
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MegaProtoXII Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for taking the time to check it out, I appreciate it. Glad you enjoyed it. If you haven't already, take a look at chapter 2, I feel it's better than this one.
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Realise-FrenchFries Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I will carry on reading, I am really enjoying this :)
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